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DBQ Prompt: "Reform movements in the United States sought to expand democratic ideals." Assess the validity of this statement with specific reference to the years 1825-1850. (Refer to your email for the documents)
Assignment:
1) Share your thesis statements. Number them and keep them in the same format, so that they are easy to read. Feel free to share ideas about the thesis statement strengths and weaknesses on the bottom of the wiki webpage by beginning a discussion thread.
1] Zach Benner
The Reform Movements of 1825-1850 sought to spread the ideal of Democracy. Through these years people of the Reform Movements try to reform our infant nation through a democratic means. What I mean by democratic means, is that people took the advantage of the First Amendment which states that we are granted these fundamental rights, “Congress shall make no law respecting an establishment of religion, or prohibiting the free exercise thereof; or abridging the freedom of speech, or of the press; or the right of the people peaceably to assemble, and to petition the Government for a redress of grievances.” Through the First Amendment, Abolitionist, Preachers, and Common people could voice their opinion on what they thought should change through words instead of brute force or create a new Protestant domination that would fit your needs. With the Reform Movements at full swing, this would show the possibilities of a free government and it would be able to spread to the Western frontiers with the spreading of the ideal of democracy though the reforms. [Zach, this is way too long. Kill about 80% of it and write a direct and specific sentence, ok?]
2] Walter Bohn
It’s true that reform movements in the U.S. by exploiting the 1st amendment, and citizen’s right to freedom of religion. A number of religious movements during the years 1825-1850 all expressed different democratic ideals and rights. Rights like freedom of religion, freedom of assembly, and freedom of speech. Abolitionists, Preachers, and the common man could all express their own ideas in these new democratic ideals. [Walter, this is a bit grammatically confusing. Your 'rights' sentence doesn't have a verb. It's overall convoluted and somewhat misunderstood. How about something like, "Blank, blank and blank were all examples of how reform movements in 1825-1850 expanded democratic ideals for many Americans."]
3] Leslie Reis
The reform movements in the United States were meant to expand democratic ideals, and this expansion of the ideals was shown through the new ideas involving equal rights, freedom of religion, and the right to vote. [Leslie, when you say 'meant to' it takes away an active sense of the verb. Was it an intent or outcome?]
4] Joelhead
Reform occured in many American aspects of society; socially by enforcing more powerful laws, religiously with the new wave of religious uprising and politically with the reforming of the American democracy, all of which helped America expand its democratic ideals. [Joelhead, how does enforcing powerful laws expand democratic ideals? How does a religious uprising do that? Get what I mean?]
5] Monica Vasconcelos
During the years 1825-1850, religious, political, and social reform movements took place in the United States in order to expand democratic ideas. [Monica, in the interests of short thesis statements, I think this one went on too deep of a diet. What specific reform movements and how did they expand democratic ideals?]
6] Pamela Racine
During the years of 1825-1850 reform movements in the United States sought to expand democratic ideals through religious reformation during the Second Great Awakening, reformations on human rights as in the abolition of slavery, and changing political views like the establishment of new government parties. [Pamela, you might want to make a distinction between 'sought' and outcomes. Was the intent to expand democracy or was that the result? Arguments can be made for different positions. You also want to measure success quantitatively, as in the case of abolitionism. How successful was it in expanding democratic ideals?]
7] Robert Krupa
During what has become known as the Jackson Era, the years 1825 to 1850, many reform movements were made that helped spread the ideas of democracy, including The Second Great Awakening; in which the freedoms of religion and speech were widely used, and increased political reform by increasing voting rights. [Robert, when you mentioned that reform movements 'were made' it doesn't sound active. It soulds like a conveyor belt. You also mention 'the ideals' of democracy. Are there specific ideals that you are referring to? When you mention freedom of religion, take into account the persecution of the Mormons as well.]
8] James Racine
Reform movements from the 1820's to the 1850's spread democratic ideals by spreading the principles of equality and human rights in their progress in reforming asylums, education, and woman's sufferage. [James, 'in their progress in' is a bit confusing. You might want to reverse your sentence in a way similar to the comment I gave Walter above.] Reform movements from the 1820's to the 1850's helped to spread democratic ideals by supporting the principles of equality and human rights through their progress in reforming the prison system, reforming the education system, and steps made towards obtaining woman's suffrage.
9] Branden Shorey
13] Rebecca Kanter
Assignment:
1) Share your thesis statements. Number them and keep them in the same format, so that they are easy to read. Feel free to share ideas about the thesis statement strengths and weaknesses on the bottom of the wiki webpage by beginning a discussion thread.
1] Zach Benner
The Reform Movements of 1825-1850 sought to spread the ideal of Democracy. Through these years people of the Reform Movements try to reform our infant nation through a democratic means. What I mean by democratic means, is that people took the advantage of the First Amendment which states that we are granted these fundamental rights, “Congress shall make no law respecting an establishment of religion, or prohibiting the free exercise thereof; or abridging the freedom of speech, or of the press; or the right of the people peaceably to assemble, and to petition the Government for a redress of grievances.” Through the First Amendment, Abolitionist, Preachers, and Common people could voice their opinion on what they thought should change through words instead of brute force or create a new Protestant domination that would fit your needs. With the Reform Movements at full swing, this would show the possibilities of a free government and it would be able to spread to the Western frontiers with the spreading of the ideal of democracy though the reforms. [Zach, this is way too long. Kill about 80% of it and write a direct and specific sentence, ok?]
2] Walter Bohn
It’s true that reform movements in the U.S. by exploiting the 1st amendment, and citizen’s right to freedom of religion. A number of religious movements during the years 1825-1850 all expressed different democratic ideals and rights. Rights like freedom of religion, freedom of assembly, and freedom of speech. Abolitionists, Preachers, and the common man could all express their own ideas in these new democratic ideals. [Walter, this is a bit grammatically confusing. Your 'rights' sentence doesn't have a verb. It's overall convoluted and somewhat misunderstood. How about something like, "Blank, blank and blank were all examples of how reform movements in 1825-1850 expanded democratic ideals for many Americans."]
3] Leslie Reis
The reform movements in the United States were meant to expand democratic ideals, and this expansion of the ideals was shown through the new ideas involving equal rights, freedom of religion, and the right to vote. [Leslie, when you say 'meant to' it takes away an active sense of the verb. Was it an intent or outcome?]
4] Joelhead
Reform occured in many American aspects of society; socially by enforcing more powerful laws, religiously with the new wave of religious uprising and politically with the reforming of the American democracy, all of which helped America expand its democratic ideals. [Joelhead, how does enforcing powerful laws expand democratic ideals? How does a religious uprising do that? Get what I mean?]
5] Monica Vasconcelos
During the years 1825-1850, religious, political, and social reform movements took place in the United States in order to expand democratic ideas. [Monica, in the interests of short thesis statements, I think this one went on too deep of a diet. What specific reform movements and how did they expand democratic ideals?]
6] Pamela Racine
During the years of 1825-1850 reform movements in the United States sought to expand democratic ideals through religious reformation during the Second Great Awakening, reformations on human rights as in the abolition of slavery, and changing political views like the establishment of new government parties. [Pamela, you might want to make a distinction between 'sought' and outcomes. Was the intent to expand democracy or was that the result? Arguments can be made for different positions. You also want to measure success quantitatively, as in the case of abolitionism. How successful was it in expanding democratic ideals?]
7] Robert Krupa
During what has become known as the Jackson Era, the years 1825 to 1850, many reform movements were made that helped spread the ideas of democracy, including The Second Great Awakening; in which the freedoms of religion and speech were widely used, and increased political reform by increasing voting rights. [Robert, when you mentioned that reform movements 'were made' it doesn't sound active. It soulds like a conveyor belt. You also mention 'the ideals' of democracy. Are there specific ideals that you are referring to? When you mention freedom of religion, take into account the persecution of the Mormons as well.]
8] James Racine
Reform movements from the 1820's to the 1850's spread democratic ideals by spreading the principles of equality and human rights in their progress in reforming asylums, education, and woman's sufferage. [James, 'in their progress in' is a bit confusing. You might want to reverse your sentence in a way similar to the comment I gave Walter above.] Reform movements from the 1820's to the 1850's helped to spread democratic ideals by supporting the principles of equality and human rights through their progress in reforming the prison system, reforming the education system, and steps made towards obtaining woman's suffrage.
9] Branden Shorey
Reform movements between 1825 and 1850 did help spread the democratic ideals due to the movements in education, religion, politics and women's rights. [Shorey, good although you don't say how. Its also confusing in that you don't say that education, religion, etc are reform movements themselves or if they are the results of reform movements. Know what I mean?]
10] Zachary White-
10] Zachary White-
Political, social, and religious reform movements of the 1825-1850 expanded democratic ideals. [Zach wins the prize for the shortest thesis! OK. Now lets fix it. What specific reform movements? How did they expand freedom?]
11] Jessica Jacintho
During the antebellum years of 1825 to 1850, reform movements expanded democratic ideals such as equality across the United States. Several of these reforms, which were products of the Second Great Awakening, used the freedoms of religion and speech such as in women's sufferage and the abolition of slavery. [Jessica, was equality one of the ideals or the only one you wanted to discuss? In your second sentence you mention 'several of these reforms' but which are you referring to? Also, don't confuse the idea of the freedom of speech and/or religion. Its perhaps a question of means or ends. Think about it. Let me know if you have questions.]
12] Kevin Goulart
The reform movements from 1825-1850 expanded democratic ideals through the Second Great Awakening and other religious reforms, human rights, and politics. [Kevin, what other religious reforms are you referring to? Also, you should be specific when mentioning human rights and politics. What specifically do you mean?]
11] Jessica Jacintho
During the antebellum years of 1825 to 1850, reform movements expanded democratic ideals such as equality across the United States. Several of these reforms, which were products of the Second Great Awakening, used the freedoms of religion and speech such as in women's sufferage and the abolition of slavery. [Jessica, was equality one of the ideals or the only one you wanted to discuss? In your second sentence you mention 'several of these reforms' but which are you referring to? Also, don't confuse the idea of the freedom of speech and/or religion. Its perhaps a question of means or ends. Think about it. Let me know if you have questions.]
12] Kevin Goulart
The reform movements from 1825-1850 expanded democratic ideals through the Second Great Awakening and other religious reforms, human rights, and politics. [Kevin, what other religious reforms are you referring to? Also, you should be specific when mentioning human rights and politics. What specifically do you mean?]
13] Rebecca Kanter
Reform movements in America from 1825-1830 expanded democratic ideals such as freedom of speech and freedom of religion through the Second Great Awakening, the abolition of slavery, and women's sufferage. [Hm. So there was 'more' freedom of speech and religion? To say that implies that the federal government had a role in helping these reform movements would be hard to prove.]
14] Greg Larsen
Some reform movements between 1825 and 1850 sought to expand democratic ideals because they focused on trying to improve education, build equality across gender and racial lines, and the expand rights and protections for certain groups, including young criminals and the mentally ill. [Greg, you can leave out the 'it is accurate to say'. It's more direct without it.] {Fixed.}
Tyler Wilkinson
During the period from 1825 to 1850, the reform movements of the era, helped promote democracy and democratic ideals, such as equality for all and true religious freedom.
16. Taran Riggs-Hart
Socially, the years between 1825 and 1850 were a time of reform in spreading the democratic ideals the country was founded on through steps in equal rights, freedom of religion, and educational improvements.
17.Keith Fortin
The years 1825 to 1850 was a very progressive in the movement towards freedom of religion, improvements in education, the prison system, basically more equal rights.
18. Rachel Acevedo
Reform movements, that occurred from 1825 to 1850, promoted democratic ideas such as improvements in the education systems and prison systems, social and racial equality, temperance, and spiritual enlightment throughout America.
19. Brandon Koster
From the years of 1825-1850 could best be known as the reform movement for spreading Democratic ideals in the advancement of education, temperance, women’s rights, and religious movements across the country.
2) Collect outside information. Below the thesis statements, create and add to a numbered list of topics, statistics, events, issues, individuals, etc. that are not in the documents but could be used in the essay to support the thesis.
Zach Benner-
First Amendment
Congress shall make no law respecting an establishment of religion, or prohibiting the free exercise thereof; or abridging the freedom of speech, or of the press; or the right of the people peaceably to assemble, and to petition the Government for a redress of grievances
Im going to use the first amendment as my main point how the reform help spread the ideals of democracy. Because with out this fundemental amendment none of the reforms would of gone into replace. So the First Amendment help secure their sermons, abolitionist papers, common people disagreeing with government policies and laws, they could petition agianst it. Thats how im going to use the First Amendment in my DBQ.
Rachel Acevedo
woman reform : Lucretia Mott and Elizabeth Cady Stanton pushed for the right to vote and for equality between genders. they published the "Declaration of Sentiments" which talks about both women and men are created equal at the Seneca Falls Convention in N.Y., in July 1848 William Lloyd Garrison, Wendell Phillips, and Frederick Douglass also supported the right of women to speak and participate equally with men ( as abolitionists).
prison reform : Dorothea Dix - showed how the mentally ill were being treated in prisons and showed the diseases in the prison and the bad sanitary conditions in there. she helped improve prison conditions and help create mental hospitals so that the mentally ill could be seperated from the criminals. (:
Tyler Wilkinson
First Ammendament- freedom of religion, press, assembly, and speech, these rights were not allowed for women, even though there was no legal prevention
Religious reform was due to the Second Great Awakening
3) Analyze the documents. Documents A through H will be listed. Underneath each, please explain how you should and will use those documents.
Greg Larsen
Document D: Samuel Morse represents the reformers who supported laws that made it more difficult to become a full American citizen. Alleging that a Catholic conspiracy ("the Holy Alliance") was trying to undermine the U.S. government and that the need for immigrants had waned because of the increased size of the population at the time he wrote this report, he called for a law that would ban any foreigner, naturalized or not, from voting. He believed that immigrants had become more focused on following the Pope's orders than supporting American liberty. This document can be used to show that not all of the reform movements sought to expand democratic ideals, in particular the immigration reformers, since it calls for the disenfranchisement of a group of citizens. Document E: William McGuffey was trying to teach the children who read his Reader a variety of values, some more supportive of democratic ideals that others. He paints a picture of a "good boy" being content with his place in society. He cites the notion that God determines richness and poorness, which is very undemocratic. The document is in direct opposition of the democratic ideal of climbing a social ladder to raise one's social status. It also attempts to build an idea that complacency is good, which runs contrary to the ideal of deeming political officials inadequate and electing new ones. However, it clearly does support the democratic ideals of hard work for the greater good and living in a highly cohesive, work-sharing family. This document can be used to show that some reform groups, specifically the education reformers, advocated some democratic values while working against others.
Rachel Acevedo
Document H: The drunkards Progress shows how alcohol affected the men of that time. Men could not control themselves and they were not suitable to be drinking it. it begins with one glass and then ends up killing them from either suicide or alcohol related diseases. This picture shows how alcohol can not only ruin the man but also ruin the mans family. i would use this when talking about the Temperance movement and how they used this to advertise and get people to realize the affects of a drink.
Document I: Elizabeth Cady Stanton was one of the main reformers in the womens rights reformation. In this document she talks about how they support the government with taxes yet can not vote. how man is able to imprison his wife and that woman should be free just as man is. i will use this when im talking about the women rights movement. and how it affected everyone.
Thanks!
14] Greg Larsen
Some reform movements between 1825 and 1850 sought to expand democratic ideals because they focused on trying to improve education, build equality across gender and racial lines, and the expand rights and protections for certain groups, including young criminals and the mentally ill. [Greg, you can leave out the 'it is accurate to say'. It's more direct without it.] {Fixed.}
Tyler Wilkinson
During the period from 1825 to 1850, the reform movements of the era, helped promote democracy and democratic ideals, such as equality for all and true religious freedom.
16. Taran Riggs-Hart
Socially, the years between 1825 and 1850 were a time of reform in spreading the democratic ideals the country was founded on through steps in equal rights, freedom of religion, and educational improvements.
17.Keith Fortin
The years 1825 to 1850 was a very progressive in the movement towards freedom of religion, improvements in education, the prison system, basically more equal rights.
18. Rachel Acevedo
Reform movements, that occurred from 1825 to 1850, promoted democratic ideas such as improvements in the education systems and prison systems, social and racial equality, temperance, and spiritual enlightment throughout America.
19. Brandon Koster
From the years of 1825-1850 could best be known as the reform movement for spreading Democratic ideals in the advancement of education, temperance, women’s rights, and religious movements across the country.
2) Collect outside information. Below the thesis statements, create and add to a numbered list of topics, statistics, events, issues, individuals, etc. that are not in the documents but could be used in the essay to support the thesis.
Zach Benner-
First Amendment
Congress shall make no law respecting an establishment of religion, or prohibiting the free exercise thereof; or abridging the freedom of speech, or of the press; or the right of the people peaceably to assemble, and to petition the Government for a redress of grievances
Im going to use the first amendment as my main point how the reform help spread the ideals of democracy. Because with out this fundemental amendment none of the reforms would of gone into replace. So the First Amendment help secure their sermons, abolitionist papers, common people disagreeing with government policies and laws, they could petition agianst it. Thats how im going to use the First Amendment in my DBQ.
Rachel Acevedo
woman reform : Lucretia Mott and Elizabeth Cady Stanton pushed for the right to vote and for equality between genders. they published the "Declaration of Sentiments" which talks about both women and men are created equal at the Seneca Falls Convention in N.Y., in July 1848 William Lloyd Garrison, Wendell Phillips, and Frederick Douglass also supported the right of women to speak and participate equally with men ( as abolitionists).
prison reform : Dorothea Dix - showed how the mentally ill were being treated in prisons and showed the diseases in the prison and the bad sanitary conditions in there. she helped improve prison conditions and help create mental hospitals so that the mentally ill could be seperated from the criminals. (:
Tyler Wilkinson
First Ammendament- freedom of religion, press, assembly, and speech, these rights were not allowed for women, even though there was no legal prevention
Religious reform was due to the Second Great Awakening
3) Analyze the documents. Documents A through H will be listed. Underneath each, please explain how you should and will use those documents.
Greg Larsen
Document D: Samuel Morse represents the reformers who supported laws that made it more difficult to become a full American citizen. Alleging that a Catholic conspiracy ("the Holy Alliance") was trying to undermine the U.S. government and that the need for immigrants had waned because of the increased size of the population at the time he wrote this report, he called for a law that would ban any foreigner, naturalized or not, from voting. He believed that immigrants had become more focused on following the Pope's orders than supporting American liberty. This document can be used to show that not all of the reform movements sought to expand democratic ideals, in particular the immigration reformers, since it calls for the disenfranchisement of a group of citizens. Document E: William McGuffey was trying to teach the children who read his Reader a variety of values, some more supportive of democratic ideals that others. He paints a picture of a "good boy" being content with his place in society. He cites the notion that God determines richness and poorness, which is very undemocratic. The document is in direct opposition of the democratic ideal of climbing a social ladder to raise one's social status. It also attempts to build an idea that complacency is good, which runs contrary to the ideal of deeming political officials inadequate and electing new ones. However, it clearly does support the democratic ideals of hard work for the greater good and living in a highly cohesive, work-sharing family. This document can be used to show that some reform groups, specifically the education reformers, advocated some democratic values while working against others.
Rachel Acevedo
Document H: The drunkards Progress shows how alcohol affected the men of that time. Men could not control themselves and they were not suitable to be drinking it. it begins with one glass and then ends up killing them from either suicide or alcohol related diseases. This picture shows how alcohol can not only ruin the man but also ruin the mans family. i would use this when talking about the Temperance movement and how they used this to advertise and get people to realize the affects of a drink.
Document I: Elizabeth Cady Stanton was one of the main reformers in the womens rights reformation. In this document she talks about how they support the government with taxes yet can not vote. how man is able to imprison his wife and that woman should be free just as man is. i will use this when im talking about the women rights movement. and how it affected everyone.
Thanks!
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Since when are thesis statementssupposed to be long. Yeah, mine is very short and somewhat vague, but, the thesis statement isnt supposed to give specifics or else there would be no point in writing a body for it.
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This is a very straight forward thesis and I like it. I say good job and awesome; too bad I can't think of one that good! ; (
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